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Turn to Sand by ~bluenine:iconbluenine:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




Golden, falling in patches of light between the shadows on this glass
Beams of happiness
On my knees, I prostrate myself before the Light
As my first tears in such a long time fall...
I turn to sand
Colored like ancient scrolls
Cascading over myself, blankets of my self fall into each other
I feel the grains in my mouth as I subside
Dryness overcomes
I look once more at the Light too bright to see
Now I feel this world no more
I have returned...
©2002-2008 ~bluenine
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Submitted: February 11, 2002
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`orbital:iconorbital: Feb 11, 2002, 2:42:01 PM
I don't have any clue what to write about this.
I think that I will leave myself in the mystery intended and not ask what your inspiration for this poem was. I do it to everyone with my poetry.

This is so incredible.
I feel like this whenever I'm alone.
During the weeks when She's not around...
I return to sorrow.
Worried


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`orbital:iconorbital: Feb 11, 2002, 2:53:55 PM
I forgot to tell you that this too, is a favorite.


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`mygrane:iconmygrane: Feb 11, 2002, 5:06:51 PM
wow, that's really powerful. gave me a really sinking feeling... hard to describe. *fav*
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~lost-dreams:iconlost-dreams: Feb 11, 2002, 6:18:31 PM
again i love the imagery, but it seems so sad... i dont know what to say about it...
beautiful alex.
>woody
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~noahx01:iconnoahx01: Feb 11, 2002, 7:13:58 PM
Wow, this is so cool. It makes me think of that guy in the movie 'The Mummy'. A guy staggering to the desert and falling to his knees. This poem has great imagery and description, it actually put me there. That's always good. Great job! *fav*
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~lowra:iconlowra: Feb 12, 2002, 5:52:36 AM
Just the vivid imagery is enough to classify this as an amazing poem. You always seem to coincide images with words very well and this poem is a prime example. The whole concept of sand and being overcome with it's dryness is profound enough. Keep writing..you do it better than most people..or poets that I know.
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